Dynasty cow

try and get this published , seriously . but before you do take out the bit about worthless information and put life wisdom. only a suggestion. well done , i ...

this is a short story. and thats good , loads of people (including me ) right a start to a novel and end it at somthing like ' after killing ...

you must of put alot of work in this, and it was worth it. it draws you in almost . the charecters were good . like brendis , he wasnt ...

out of the evil armada range , this was the worst only joking , or am i . no , i was joking this was the best youve done so ...

your style is different from most of the people on this sight, in a good way. its clearrer and more understandable but despite bieng simple it has depth. write somthing ...

your a writer , right. how many books have you written so far. :shock: this was exelent like the gentle glow of the fire. Stuff from tolkien isnt better than ...

This was extremly hard to understand , so hard that i didint understand it. the discriptions were high class but you might of but too much , to make it ...

i loved the plot but it is hard to read ,and the bit about grazing yaks dosent do it any favours . i liked the hunters . i had an ...

This was good . i wouldent normally read somthing this long but this kinda grabs my attention . but there are quit efew stuff you hafto correct . not grammer ...

your style is great its realy dramatic and that but if you did the spell check thingy all the mistakes could be corrected , and the last thing is that ...

If you plan to right for (11-14) year olds don't change a thing , if it was more complicated i would have left it and went on to another story ...

its ok but how come you kept bllalalalalalalala blalalalalalalabalalablablabla blalallalalalalalabalab alabal blablablablablablalalalalalal blalalalalalalabalabnalabala skipping line even when no- one

I dont know how you can say this needed improvement ,it had realistic charecters that wouldent just say something out of the blue to fill space , it was deep ...

That was phliping exelent , i envy you , howed you do it , at one point in reading it i was lost in your words , only when i ...